Board Thread:The Last Sovereign Discussion/@comment-29984007-20180410151643/@comment-31763506-20181028214500

I decided to take a break from futile attempts to get people to bore themselves to death reading my giant ass tome to spend half the weekend digging through the Calculator and correcting the English in the new sections covering the game since the start of Ch. 4. I intended to try and merge the interface I designed for Save/Load but abandoned with Arakhne's functional Save/Load code, but that's a job for another day.

http://s000.tinyupload.com/index.php?file_id=87883268627872362011

As before, I've tried to be conservative in changing only enough to render Fulminato's English grammatically correct and non-awkward. The overwhelming majority of corrections dealt with idiomatically inappropriate use of prepositions, articles, the use of the possessive and agreement of verb forms with the grammatical number of the subjects and objects, as opposed to misused root vocabulary, conjugation errors or literally correct but idiomatically wrong phrasing. Adding the word "the" when it was inappropriate to do so or presence or absence of "'s" were by far the largest categories of mistakes.

I would have to make a detailed comparison of the changes I made to 0.3 as opposed 0.5.5 to say so definitively, but my impression is that the quality of English text has improved.

Three Minor Notes:


 * The js source seems to be conflating the Kalant suitor variable with the Kalant Support variable, and SL doesn't appear to have merged the two.
 * I rewrote the reference to "Balance of Power" in the post-Erosian Prelude conversation with Grubbak, because the phrase is loaded with the connotation of the mostly discredited diplomatic theory.
 * The flow of the line item on the reunion of Wynn and Wendis was so awkward I eventually had to delete it and rewrite it from scratch.