Talk:Simon/@comment-31763506-20170711082036

Made some general grammatical revisions in passing, with some other minor changes.

Generally:

I added a note that Hilstara and Orcent are consistently "Second in Command" in military affairs.

Riala "implanted" him with the shard, not "inocculated" him. (When not used in its literal medical sense of vaccination, "innoculate" always conveys the idea that it is something that prevents some other undesirable effect from occuring.  And we really don't want this article getting into the vaccination controversy in the English speaking countries...)

I can't make out what "exhilerate" is doing in the sentence about Simon's fatherly personality.